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...you provided an argument, but no supporting facts to carry the message. The text had no impact, as the movement was too slow, and it was too short. You have a good basis for a quality flash, but you need to rethink your script/speech, and make the typography more eye-catching.

February 26, 2009

Author's Response:

Thank you for your post.

The assignment unfortunately needed it to be around 15 seconds, I even went overbound. :/

I believe, as many have told me however, that the text was even a little too quick, not too slow.

Finally, the audio wasn't mine, it's an already existing commercial that I "flashified".

Thank you for the criticism though, appreciate it.

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Score: 10

"Amazing man!"

submission: Open Here

date: February 18, 2009

I see a future effects animator here! Wonderful stuff, dazzling effects, and the animation quickly got way better.

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Score: 8

"great!"

submission: Carried by the Wind

date: February 8, 2009

I stopped paying attention to the writing though, because it detracted from the mood. (ironically, enough) I wish those were read aloud, by the narrator. To give him some character.

February 9, 2009